There's a couple little spelling mistakes in the paper, like in the first sentance ;) But its a good start to a good story. It raises a lot of interesting questions: What was following him? Why werent the villagers afraid of whatever was following him? who are the two? this first peice sets up chapters and chapters of the story to follow.

I think you should rewrite it once you have the rest of the story figured out though, and add a few more little details that make the reader go "Oh, thats what he meant!" later in the story

thats really good! seriously, it is!