|Reviews for The Golden Rule|
| Chelseamuffin 4/30/07 . chapter 4
-Ack! What's happening between the vendor and that man! I have another idea, but... well, you know my policy XD
-Perverted guards. He made me laugh. But then Brysn interrupts them. Freaking Bryson. I don't like him.
-“Pirates get boring after a while. One more round of 'A Pirate's Life for Me', and I would have murdered the whole lot.” [Haha. I giggled.]
-Okay. Well, I have an idea a different idea as to what the twins are. Or rather, how they know Bryson and stuff. Fo' shizzle. (You know I'm cool.)
-OH! I SUDDENLY GET IT! (Re-reading the first chapter. I'm smart like that.) Ha... Haha... Ha... yeah. I thought of doing that before, but only now did I... actually do it. I'm intelligent. But yeah, that's actually what I thought of. Sorta. Lana and Mari are one, split in two. And it was "Bryson's" idea to do it. And the collars... the collars keep them alive and separate? (Yeah, I know. Screw my policy right now, I'm spilling all my ideas.)
-Okay. Um, yeah. Wharves? Never heard the word before in my life. But it's pretty pimpin'
-I. Love. Mari. I do. I really do. That part with the first mate... priceless. It really was. I laughed.
-I like how clueless Alexandria is. She's like... well, I don't know. Just very cluesless, I guess. (I'm great with words.)
-“Don't think I won't,” She grinned, teeth bared to reveal two canine-like fangs in the front. [Should be: “Don't think I won't.” She grinned, teeth bared to reveal two canine-like fangs in the front.]
Right. Well, the gist of this longass review is that I liked the chapter. It caught my attention. So many questions flowing through my mind! One question answered, another dozen asked. What could happen, what could happen!
| Chelseamuffin 4/30/07 . chapter 3
I'm back. *Waves*
Of course, we have the EBUL UNCLE character :D Why am I not surprised? Sorry if I sound mean, but that's rather cliched. Still, there's more to this story, and I'm anxious to find out more.
-Rum was passed around openly, from those barely ten years of age to the vaguely senile. [Haha. Made me laugh :D]
-The king stared at her, recognition flitting over his face, before Lana touched Mari’s arm and they followed closely after their mistress. [I hate my freaking curiosity. I can't wait to find out exactly HOW they know one another... although I DO have ideas.]
-“We must be careful of Bryson… perhaps alert Alexandria of our true selves.” [Their true selves? Yes, please do!]
-Alexandria blinked at the whole person she saw; then they were once again two women staring at each other with unfocused eyes. [Ahaa... it somewhat goes with what I think of Lana and Mari... but I'm still not saying until I find everything out XD]
-Uh-huh. Well, the ending confused me. But I'm sure it'll cme clear soon. (Right?) Yeah. Anyway... er... very nice chapter again XD I don't think that I saw any mistakes this time. So, er-next chapter!
| Chelseamuffin 4/30/07 . chapter 2
Sorry for the very long-awaited review. Things have been... hectic around my house lately. Don't worry. I may take a while, but I WILL review all of your chapters. Eventually.
All right. So. There's one little thing that kind of... bugged me a bit. It only happened once:
“You must know—sir—“ she hissed with deliberate implication. “that while Limodia may consider slavery legal, the royal family and I do not approve of it.”
Well, the wording and such was great, but before Alexandria continues with her sentence, it should be a comma, and no a period. It's only a period if she is finished with her point and beginning a new sentence. For example:
"I like," she said. "this." is incorrect. It should be: "I like," she said[,] "this."
Get it? Good :]
Sorry, that kind of thing just kind of bugs me. Anyway, good chapter. Mari and Lana are interesting enough. I can't wait to see what happens, so I'm off to your next chapter now :D
| Chelseamuffin 4/22/07 . chapter 1
That was intense. It really was.
Not everything's clear yet, though I know it will become clear soon enough.
Whatever it is, I love you for writing this. And I love Lucas. Because he seems pretty damn realistic. And... well, I don't know. I have no critisism at the moment, really. So just... yeah. Can't wait for the soon-to-come update :D
| Frosthold 4/21/07 . chapter 1
How very interesting! Can't wait to read more!
| person is gone 4/21/07 . chapter 1
To begin with: awesome. You had me by the first two sentences. I'm serious. I've never read anything this good on here.
"If he had been in his true form, his tail would have drooped."