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| painted.music 2007-04-22 ch 1,  | abusekonichiwa *rolls eyes* At least the alerts are working on fictionpress even if they aren't working for fanfiction. *sigh* This was really nice. I especially like the lines: "E am every mistak you ever made" "I am the dream yo wish you followed" and "I am the pills you should have swallowed" ... You know what, never mind. My favorite stanza is the second to last one. :) There we go - so much easier to say it that way. All right, wish I could talk for longer, but I've got to go watch my brother's baseball game. And then go to my other brother's baseball game. P.S: I loved the poem you sent me. I can see why it got published! :) I also wrote an 'If' poem (for school), but it wasn't really similar. It was sort of meaningless and just fun to write. It wasn't too great, but it wasn't like I could decide not to hand it in, right? The teacher said we had to write either a poem or a paragraph on the topic of "If" (if you were someone else, if such-and-such never happened, etc). And I was NOT about to write a paragraph, so I just scribbled down a bunch of stupid words with "IF". *shrug* Okay, REALLY late not. :) Zaijen -Shan- |
| Ashelin 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseI liked the flow of this poem. You also rhymed pretty well too. I liked the last stanza best. Great job. |
| Faithless Juliet 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abusePowerful emotions in this, I really enjoyed the read through. Keep up the godo work. Much love, Juliet. |