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| Hide Your Eyes 2007-12-29 ch 1,  | abuseThis really touched me. Thank you. |
| simpleplan13 2007-07-01 ch 1, | abuseI like this... the ending is beautiful... and I like how you admit you take it wrongly... |
| redwine.and.cigarettes 2007-05-30 ch 1, | abusethat last stanza is really beautiful. I like how the poem is largely concrete until you describe "ebbing, on the edge of stars." |
| Chandra-Moon 2007-05-29 ch 1, | abuse"The kind of love that would let us/stay, like a crescent shape, ebbing/on the edge of the stars." So much meaning to take from that. Not sure how to interpret. Love to let you stay constant...like the moon, always there. But ebbing...at the same time, the moon cycles. It is not always a crescent it is always changing. Dual meaning...draws no conclusion. I love the title of this poem. |
| Fabian Cortez 2007-04-25 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! KEEP WRITING! F.C |
| Bethiec1387 2007-04-24 ch 1, | abuseAww I like it!! Your a very good writer! |
| missmeghanh 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abuseoh wow. i know a guy named jeremy, he's one of my best friends. and something like this has happened to him. |
| Dave 2007-04-22 ch 1, anon. | abuseI Love this poem. This one belongs in a book. |
| rest assured 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is amazing. It's awful how relatable it is, but you have it down to a tee. The last stanza is gorgeous. |
| recycle rhymes 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseaw love the last stanza. love is funny that way. nice work. |
| diffident 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is like a slap in the face, a quiet kind of sad but one that's so apparent. And that is such a beautiful way of describing love.. Great job. marie |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseMarvelously visual, with an underlying theme that keeps the reader interpreting. I like how this is succinct, and to the point. This causes each word to have a greater meaning. Well developed, you've painted a vivid portrait in so few words. Excellent work. MD:77. |
| hardcore 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abusebeautiful! this is at once thoughtful and poignant. |
| Ashelin 2007-04-21 ch 1, | abuseFor some reason this poem, for being so short, drives a thousand questioning thoughts through my head...I wonder If I'm going to be able to sleep tonight with all the activity. Wonderful job as usual. Ashelin |