O! This story is really interesting! I like how Tobias is moonlighting as a teacher. That made me laugh. :} I also enjoy his attempts at writing. I can't wait to see more!

May inspiration and free time flow,
Cari Marie

You have a very interesting idea here, but your story would be easier, and more enjoyable, to read if your format was a little different. I'm not sure exactly why, but it's a lot smoother to read when you double space everything. It's a little extra work for the writer, but worth it for the reader. Just one way to make your already cool story even better!

I love it. It's so completely different than a lot of stories out there and has it's own unique vibe or whatever to it. I like the plot and Tobias is awesome. It's great and I love it. Can't wait to read more.

Oh, how I adore this story! Updates make me all fuzzy and giddy inside...

Yay! Love Max already ~ Can't wait to see what happens between him and Tobias ;)
Lovely...happy feeling chapter (:

this is really good...I like the difference between his two jobs, if that makes sense lol. i though it was well written and i cant wiat for more!

awesome story

Ah, poor guy :P Guess he needs a new plan to solve his writer's block, eh? But at least he someone to fool around with! :D That's always handy.

That first very, very long paragraph, instead of slowing down the reader like most long paragraphs do, gave a sense of no pauses.

When I started this chapter, I couldn’t remember who anyone was, so ‘the author’ and ‘the larger/smaller/elder man’ did nothing for me. Proper names are hard to overuse. The only time I’ve seen it done was when trying to hide a person’s gender. Names become invisible unless any given one is used to the exclusion of pronouns. Try re-writing this scene (or the next one) using names instead of descriptions; I think you’ll find that it flows just as well.

Jason really came out of nowhere. You had already given us descriptions of three potential (even if Tobias who never have considered them) Objects of Affection, by paying extra attention to them, so I’m wondering where Jason fits in. I eagerly await the next chapter.

Smoking hot. I love it! What's it going to take to break Tobias' writer's block?

I hate being interrupted in the middle of a love scene or really any scene that's intense. I find it hard to pick up where I left off.

I might have actually liked school if I'd had a teacher like Tobias. Carpets in schools?

A newspaper that reviews romance novels. Mine only does "serious" fiction, memoirs, and other books I don't read.

His friends and editor are right; I think it is easier to write romances when you're getting it.

I think I could use clearer transitions between scenes.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

I really love the plot of this! And Tobias is just awesome. I love his personality. Hm, I'm thinking Jason is going to turn out to be the new student. Just cause that'd be awkwardly fun and dramatic! I wish I'd had teachers like him when I was in high school... Looking forward to the next chapter!

:) poor guy isn't very lucky right now, is he? I'm sure he'll figure it out though

Tobias is very interesting. I like his teaching style. I just wonder right now about the romance of this story.Will read more!

i love the plot to this story. ppl should reveiw more, they dont know what they're missing. update soon cus you cant leave a reader hanging like that!!