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| readyforpeace 2008-02-12 ch 1,  | abuseWow this has really great imagery. I really like the alliteration of "languid lazy". This poem really makes me feel like I'm there. Great job. ~peace |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-12-20 ch 1, | abuseI love the imagery of "shredded bubbles". Throughout the entire piece, my mind kept coming back to that line. The word choice you've used really captures the poem. Well done! Thanks again for the review. |
| R. Sharmayne 2007-04-26 ch 1, | abuseYour style is very unique and almost cinematographic. Your page is like having vision after vision after vision. You have quite the sight. Beautiful job! |
| she smolders 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseThe way you describe such simple things is just gorgeous. The last line made me smile. |
| The Un-great-ful 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseNice, I think I took more from the first line than most would. Your "bullet-point" descriptive style is fun to read, it holds just the right amount for the mortal mind to ingest in one gulp. Alan. |