Guess who? ;)
So, honey, I re-read it and I thought it was beautiful, poetic and pretty sad. And emo. Sorry) But this very piece of writing proves you do have a natural talent.
Love,
Your guardian angel from Dune.

Wows...
I can honestly say that this is the most artistic piece of writing I can recall reading. Its like watching the conflicting shades of colors in my head as I read it, its beautiful, and portraying such an ugly subject matter, a true self-righteous suicide, an beautifully ugly metaphor of pain and finding peace...

Wonderfully portrayed.

Some of the language you used here was excellent, such as 'a thousand broken summers', I liked that; yet some of it unfortunately made little sense.

You have an artistic mind, I wish you luck in developing it.

Keep writing,

Alan.

This is really amazing.
I felt every word.