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| Hed in the Cloudz 2008-05-24 ch 1,  | abuseI love this title, given the topic of the poem! It makes it very in-your-face, which is always fun. And, of course, the topic itself is wonderful, as this is all entirely true! And...I had a criticism somewhere...Ah, here it is. I find it strange that you use the word "laid", which is usually used by men in a rather derogatory way, in a context where it's being used by a female. Unless, of course, these are guys who wear lipstick and want to be pretty? It just seems rather odd, though I must admit it creates the perfect amount of bluntness at the end of the phrase. --Yna, from the Review Marathon (see the link in my profile...) |
| simpleplan13 2007-07-01 ch 1, | abusehehe... I like this... its so totally true.. awesome job |
| re x invented 2007-05-10 ch 1, | abusethis brought a smile to my face. it's almost cute, the subject matter perorated with the last two lines. i dig. xx |
| Lightning Storm 2007-04-24 ch 1, | abuseI've been wondering that for ages. I just go for the movies lol Lovely witting as usual |
| none of burt's beeswax 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abusehehe i love this. i think that the mall is a social gathering place, not really a shopping area. and did you know that some people only buy books and movies to display in their collections and not because they actually like them? ah, it's awful. everyone has his/her own taste, and that's the way it should be. although i have to disagree about tops not making people look pretty 'cause when a top really accentuates the right stuff, you feel 10x better and then you look 10x better. yay for corny confidence. |
| Chemically Induced 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abusea wonderful, pessimistic view on the comtemporary lifestyle of most of us. the images here are great, and the structure with the "when" and "wont"s works very well. i dont think ill go to the mall today, now. ;) im sorry i made you sad. :( love, c.induced. |
| luv me like no other 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abusethis is so cute. i totally agree with it...though i still like the mall anyways... |
| RandoMaia 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuse*sigh* true and depressing... good job, though. |
| The Un-great-ful 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseYeah, though we don't have malls in Britain, perhaps that's a good thing, eh? Keep writing, Alan. |
| Sercus Kaynine 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseTrue, true. If you're going to buy clothes, buy something you like, not what everyone else likes. Message from the Sercus~ |