 Professor Doctor 2007-06-23 . chapter 1That was pretty, and very sad. |
 Nonya Soum 2007-05-29 . chapter 1Wow. From reading the summary, I thought this would be something totally different... Glad to know I thought wrong. I could've expected a poem filled with reflections on sadness, but then it would've been a little too predictable. The lines "Solitary drop on the windowpane//Looks like a tear but I swear its rain" kept echoing in my head after I read the poem. Those lines really stuck out and brought the poem to life. Well, to me at least. Good job!
Write on!! |
 storykeeper 2007-05-02 . chapter 1That's sad. |
 Patricia Louise 2007-04-30 . chapter 1I love this. I get the picture of a creepy little girl singing this in her own little tune. |
 ADSpencer 2007-04-27 . chapter 1Beautiful pacing. I read this outloud and enjoyed it very much. You used a simple vocabulary to explore deep emotions and I think it worked very well. |
 recycle rhymes 2007-04-22 . chapter 1definitely know the feeling here. so very true. nice metaphor! |
 Jordan Storm 2007-04-22 . chapter 1I like this, but the missing apostropes (which is a really annoying word to spell) distracts from the emotion |
 Ashelin 2007-04-22 . chapter 1This is practically heartbreaking, and so terribly relatable. Wonderful job, I loved "Single drop on the windowpane/Looks like a tear but I swear to God its rain" Beautiful. Great job. |