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| A Perfect Sonnet 2008-02-28 ch 1,  | abuseFirst off: Favorites! And for the review: I love.love.loved this. Especially the first two parts. They were nicely human and kind of strange in that really likable and honest way. You made brand names your own instead of advertising. AND you spun them into a lovers language that was still understandable and translated. That's what makes this exceptional. I want to tell you all the lines and parts I specifically loved, but it would be most of the poem so I think that might be excessive. I will tell you that I knew I was going to like this poem as I read the first three lines and I knew I loved it when I read the fourth ("sugar rush sex"). And good god I love how you bothered to think about what you were saying! That's something I dislike about most FP "poetry." I mean: "(global warming versus human combustion)." That was exceptional. Now I could go on and on, but I'm really impatient to read more of your poetry. So I'm going to go do that. But thank you for sharing this poem. It was wonderful. |
| generically beautiful 2007-09-07 ch 1, | abuseso beautifully sweet and sad at the same time. |
| darkling thrush 2007-06-26 ch 1, | abusethis is exceptional! i admire your obvious talent. there's not much i can say, because it's wonderful. i mean... cereal? you have an amazing imagination and unique way of wording things. i thoroughly enjoyed this, and got some wonderful images out of it. thanks :) |
| xx-cronopio-xx 2007-04-29 ch 1, | abuseThe fact that you possess the capacity to entwine different cereal brands and their nuances into a love poem - let alone pull it off with eclat- speaks volumes about your talent. :) Though I was skeptical at first when I glanced at the title and summary - really, it's almost impossible to read or speak the words "cap 'n crunch" without raising one's eyebrows - you managed both to retain your credibility and produce a genuinely clever spoof. Adieu, Kat |
| she smolders 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseThat was a very original analogy you used with the cereal. There's a few lines of this that make me feel like crying for/with her: "with me standing in a puddle of milk and bottled tears as the intercom screams cleanup in aisle seven." And there's so much truth in the last line. Take care. |
| Crossing the Rubicon 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is so bittersweet and wonderfully original. I especially loved the stanza about the alpha-bits. :) |
| flyinghome 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseWow, that was sad but really good!! I especially love the third part! |
| recycle rhymes 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abusewow sad...but poignant. i guess the best poems move you. a lot of great imagery and metaphors in here. nice work. |
| A Heart Upon Wings 2007-04-22 ch 1, | abuseOh, my God. I love this. I am saving it to my favorites. This is really beautiful and artistic. I LOVE IT. |