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AquaCherry 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abuseAw... I want to cry. This was so beautifully written. Seriously. Is there going to be a squeal? I would like one. Charlie and Simon really grew on me. Even Tina and Katie. You have an amazing way with words. They grab me and pull me in. :)
b 2008-03-16 ch 1,	abusewow, i've never read in second person before, and it worked quite well! i really like how all the misunderstandings came out in charlie's pov, and i really like the ending because it's not incredibly descriptive, but it's still oh-so-heartwarming. :)
Prince Of Cats 2008-01-30 ch 1,	abuseOh, this is so good! The ending really got me, with the sand castle metaphor, and how Charlie could never quite build sand castles. I like the POV switch as well, though it did feel a little repetitive with Charlie's, the ending really made up for it, and the gas station scene. I like how the story shows just how differently they're both seeing the same situation.
yaoi adikt 2008-01-22 ch 1,	abuseI love how you use second p.o.v. Its different than most stories, very creative.
Dawn-at-Midnight 2008-01-19 ch 1,	abuseIt was perfect, I loved it! There was the perfect blend of angst that ended happily-or at least what I imagine as a happy ending. The point of view switch was brilliant, and it made you realize just how clueless they were to each other's feelings. Wonderful job with this...it was amazing... ~Dawn
awed reader 2008-01-13 ch 1, anon.	abusewow. this is really good. simon's pov made my heart clench and charlie's pov had me shaking my head fondly at how oblivious they are to each other's feelings. i thought it was really interesting how you decided to write this in second person. i think it creates a nice effect using "you" instead of "i" because it seems to draw the reader into what's happening in a more personal way...or maybe i'm just pulling this out of my butt. i liked how the story came full circle and the roles were switched in the end. i also liked how you stuck to charlie's pov in the end. as i read, i wondered how you would end the story but i feel it's better that you didn't switch back to simon for the ending since that would just detract from the simplicity of the story's format. and since simon told the beginning, charlie might as well tell the end. i like how it's open-ended but there are enough clues for us to figure out that something's finally going to happen. i just didn't understand how charlie could figure it out right then when he couldn't at all before. oh well. anyways, there's probably some other stuff i'd wanted to say but i can't remember, so i'll just stop here. good work. ^_^
ddz008 2008-01-12 ch 1,	abuseGreat one-shot!! I really love it... so sweet and dramatic. I'll just have to hope they'll have a happy ending.
Amopet4 2008-01-09 ch 1,	abuseGorgeous. Stunning. No words left, but awe.
firestar267 2007-11-19 ch 1,	abuseAw, just wow. I loved the point of view change especially, this was really great well done :)
katie 2007-10-26 ch 1, anon.	abusegood grief. this is a beautiful piece of writing too :o definitely frustrating... but the simple ending makes up for it. it's kinda like...coming full-circle. they meet building sandcastles and years later here they are again, only with simon helping charlie this time. oh, it's all nice. i like it! (although i have to say...simon's pov made my eyes tear up in some places. not good)
igloothree 2007-10-01 ch 1,	abuseWOW. That's all I can say. This was fantastic, all the miscommunication, and the ending was BEAUTIFUL -- I loved that you left it somewhat open-ended, but it's obvious that things are looking up from here. It was a great place to end the story, really. :D
Ayakaishi Fei 2007-09-17 ch 1,	abuseAw... My brain has turned to mush. I've added you to my favorite authors cause I love the way you write. So, so cute :)
nonaccount 2007-08-08 ch 1,	abuseVery sweet. I would have liked a little more resolution in the ending, but I can fill in the blanks. ;)
nobody's slave 2007-07-15 ch 1,	abuseSweet. NS
i-see-faeries 2007-07-07 ch 1,	abuseAw, so cute. It's sweet how they get each others signlas mixed up. They are so adorable. I liked reading in Charlie's POV better though ... Don't know why, just do ... I love this, although the ending was pretty open-ended.

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