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| a Cornucopia of Love 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseAw, man! That's all you have? Darn it! xD I would really like to see more of this. It was fun to read and I really like how you characterized Lucifer, and Daria's quirky narrative, and breathed some life into Hell. It was awesome! It'd be totally cool if there was more to this. The world and characters you created seemed so interesting; it would make for a good story!! |
| Storyteller Knight 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abuseAwesome beginning! I really enjoyed Daria's frank manner about her position in life. I really liked the comment about the bat wings and how that kept coming up as to why he can't enjoy his life on earth. I hope you continue. I would love to see more of a backstory on Daria, Lizbeth and Lucifer as well as some interaction between them. From the way they've been described, it sounds rather amusing. ~Storyteller (Phoenix) Knight |
| Brook Pendelton 2007-04-23 ch 1, | abuseYou are a fantastic writer. Not only is this an original idea that doesn't follow in the arch-typal and chliche that the rest of the world has set, but it's gorgeous style. The one thing I might add to this would be a little more humor instead of the simple spewing of facts. But, hey, it's your thing and it's great. Especially the way you ended. "Message-End." |