This is pretty awesome. All nonsensical, like being in your head and seeing all the listless emotion and well done. I just have a little problem with the very short lines. They detract from the power, somehow, I think?

lol i feel with the wind ( i just laughed when i first saw that and i have no idea why) haha love the title. nice work.

I loved the ending. The finality of that shook me. Wonderful piece, you have a strong talent here. Keep up the good work.

Much love,

Juliet.

we were right when we said that some of your best poems would come out of this.