Beautifully done; that's all I could say about this. The dialogue was natural, already pointed out by the previous review. It reminds me of the opening scene of Pulp Fiction, and like I said: the only thing I could say about this is that it's beautifully done. Now I'm repeating myself since I can't find anything wrong with the story.

Good stuff, this writing.

See ya.

Well, as M. Night Shyamalan might say, "What a twist!" That caught me completely off guard, but it might have been too unexpected. I had to read that twice before I understood exactly what happened. Also, I kinda wanted to see the waiter interact with Jale and the narrator. I thought it'd be fun.

That being said, this was a very entertaining story to read. The dialogue was natural and nice, the flow and pace was spot on, and it just felt good. I got into the characters, I enjoyed the humor, and I just plain enjoyed reading it. And I liked how you came back to the opening line. Excellent story.


Love and Peace!

PS - While this is a one-shot, you got any plans to make any other stories with this character?