well, the structure of your paragraphs needs a bit of work, and a comma more often would help with making the reading more dramatic. Chaos is a cool character, and the resembalence to my on OC is a little creepy. a few plot holes i did notice though.

1: Sunny is more powerful then Chaos by a whole lot right? so how the hell did Chaos, who is weaker then him, manage to beat the guards who completely trashed him?

2: the fight scenes are decent, but try to incorporate a bit more detail into them. as they are now, they just seem to run on and on with little detail beyond attack descriptions. have them throw chairs, blood fly, bones break, etc. Livin it up! people love it when the bad guys really get it, and a brutal death for a bad guy(or a good guy) can really spice up a chapter.

3: the saving of your characters is rather bad, by all accounts. having someone always manage to swoop in and save the day every time makes the battles boring, because there's no threat of death. make them suffer! no one wants to read about the characters having s so-so day. they want to see the person have the worst day in their entire life.

4: he should have a much harder time gaining the trust of the people and heros, simply because of his demon form. people are very fearful of those differant from themselves, and Chaos is a freaking demon.

other then that, the plot so far is cool, and while i dont know what your baseing the world off of, try to tone down the "A-class, B-class" stuff. its not useful knowing how much more powerful the enemy is if their just going to be saved by a random hero that is nothing more then a "Author Save" goog luck, and hope you dont blow a gasket by reading this.

Hmm...The length was rather disappointing, The party hilarious, the defeat of the villain amusing...pretty good. But I think I want Chaos and Myria to meet Kai formally. He does, after all, keep taking their villains. And a conclusion to the affair of the Hero who attacked Chaos. That would best have been done at the party, and if more attention were called to Chaos, he might not be targeted be SuperHeroes quite so much.

Aww... epiphany plus falling-in-love. Now if only he didn't have a girlfriend already...

:D CD

hey, he's a two-timer!

Is he like the reincarnation of the Great Lord dude? And where is his girlfriend? Especially with him meeting all these Superhero girls...lol

cool story

kai was always one of my favorite characters. he's so cool!

ooh! a cliffie!

seriously, it must suck getting the crap kicked out of you every day. trouble with women, trouble at work - good thing he doesnt have a real day job, otherwise he'd probably have money problems too.

This truly is a fresh, new version of the old, with enough of the original to keep the old fans (myself included) and a healthy mix of new to show how you've improved.

I'm not sure how much I liked the mouth-swording, but it did show something important about Chaos. He's willing to keep fighting regardless of the personal cost.

I should probably go to sleep for now, but I will try and read the next chapter tomorrow. Keep up the excellent work.

Dun dun dun! It's butt kickin' time!

Well written, this chapter does a lot to show us more about Michael's personality, as well as gives us a glance at how far he needs to come yet...

Now, on to the next one!

Once again, good fighting detail. And good cliffhanger.

I like the story. I wonder who his parents are.

Dude! Great action. Keep it up. I'm still behind my previous thoughts for your story though.

this story is great. I like it a lot