Rhyme claims your vine of creativity.

great poem. i can so relate to it. wood work!

This made me smile :)

Well done!

hahahaha love it, its like at first you are thinking, woah, what is up with this? Then you get it hahahaha thats awesome, great job

Excuse the bullet point form, and the negative and the positive being all over the place.

•Bad imagery with porcelain bowl.
•11 syllable in 9th line. Seems clunky, primarily with the “till I might just explode part”
•Interesting pun, or unintentional pun with vain near the begining. Image of a head there, a vein of a head which connects cleverly to the conclusion of the poem.
•Raging and burning yet liquid in flow is a superb line.
•7th line feels like it needs a separate stanza, and this poem would be more effective if it was divided into stanzas.
•They compact and compress till I might just explode, I definitely understand this.
•Bad image with the train, doesn’t connect for me, personally, the fluidity or clarity of a thought, nor the image of a thought beyond reach, expression or language. A broken train is a tame image for such a powerful conflict.
•Painfully so that I feel like my whole might just render seems slightly forced, or awkward when spoken aloud.
•I don’t understand why there is woe? And souls mentioned? Writers block is something of the imagination, the mind to me, and you mention the head and end with the head. I don’t like the confusion, or introduction of such a concept to a very physical and mental activity of trying to express writing.
•Interesting idea of “stone like intruder”, very definite image there and I like it a lot.
•Haunts like a ghost is sort of weak but acceptable. Taunts like a child is bang on, and I really like that.
•Brevity and levity seems *awfully* forced.
•Death throes? I would imagine more submission or retreat than anything, rather than death.
•Good expression of release with shortened words and phrases.
•Self granted peace is good.
•I don’t entirely understand “his cousins’ defeat”
•Interesting ending, which is bright and humorous which is effective because it reflects the release of the serious anguish of the topic.
•If there is any other meaning in the poem, it could be difficult to find due to the title shaping the meaning so firmly.

In conclusion, and general wrap-up: This poem needs a structure, and it needs to sort out it’s rhyming structure and occasional syllable structure. Some really good images, and good message overall and I come away from it with a definite meaning to it. Slightly too self reflective on the act of writing for my tastes, and for me, brings more of the same to the board of ideas, but in a good way (primarily stone intruder, and the idea of a taunting child). I do have concerns to who this is directed towards, as writers get it, but who else would? Simply an issue to ponder as to your target audience.

I enjoyed it a lot, but it definately could do with some work to really shine.

It's a catchy-type poem...now all you need's a tune. The last line made me laugh...some good imagery in there. I especially liked the bit about it being a battle to get through writer's block. The rhyming seemed a bit distractin at times, though. I'm not sure how to improve on that, if you even want to...