aww i can relate to that nice job

There is a set of lines that I reaaly love, and I think they're beautiful, basically.

"But would they believe me//
They're disillusioned by your trickery"

OKay, yeah, so it's mainly that last line, but still... the poem itself is really profound... now I want to know what the secret was... gosh darn.

Good job!

I really like this. It's got a nice flow, but is still real. It feels real and it has a personality, which I think is really important. I like the word choice and the formatting too, especially at the end where there are two one-word lines, then a sentence, and then a not-quite word. It's a really nice ending. Anyways, great job.

yikes
it's a good poem but still
yikes

damn girl, i just say been there done that! but i mena what to do!