I like this one quite a bit more than Guardian Man(maybe because the other one was leaning towards guy/guy lol)but aside from that the style of this one is a lot cleaner...details blended much better...I did notice a few things...although now when I'm trying to think back to what they are...They evade me, making me think that it was just my subconscious trying to sound intelligent...I was able to get into the flow and tempo of the story imagining as I read, and when got to the end...I was kind of disappointed that it didn't keep going.

- Kollin

The accents are right, I think. Dunno for sure, though. I like this story. I shall be keeping an eye on it. ^^