I think this type of story happens quite often, the kind when two people have feelings for each other but dont have courage to express how they feel. And when that happens, they end up not being with each other. Sad, I know. Sort of the stuff that we see on teleseryes, lol. But with teleseryes, they always manage to get the "characters" back together for the sake of what the viewers like. Your story now has pretty much the same context but I must say you chose meaningful words which fits great within the plot. Good job.ü

how sad. good though.

To start of, it is a good story. Short but fattened up with beautifully phrased sentences. And finishing it one day is something. I like the beginning of the story. Foreshadowing, I like that technique. It showed that it has something light yet deep. The story actully feels like it was pulled out of a real life situation. Although, slightly typical scenario. Expressing regret and deep torment. A heart crushing story of people who always wanted to be together but neither of them able to make the leap. Your descriptions were a bit aiming toward the "dark side". Nevertheless it was nicely tied together. Now, the ending made me feel that there was hope, since it was a wish. :D

Whoa.
Whoa.
Whoa.
I wasn't used the tense that you used. I kept having to go back and re-reading what you had before, to make sure you weren't switching tenses.
But holy crap. This is amazing. I told you that it would sound good as a short story. I'm glad you wrote it as a poem first, though. This explains it very well.
I'm just so used to past tense, that when it was written in this tense, it threw me off a little bit. But I like it that way, it made me think about it more.
Good job!!
=D