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| Nemonus 2007-04-26 ch 1,  | abuseGood. You describe an emotion which is too foreign and complex for some people (I think) well, with illustrations of the feelings you have ("my imagination is wild with envy," contrasts nicely with "I call out another’s name, with the intent of hurting you,") and the physical fantasies ("I’ve traced a million times in my dreams" is nice), although sometimes you go too far into the lust corner for me to really like the poem. Rhythm is ok. Nice evocation of the emotion and scene. It reminds me of Phantom of the Opera. |
| Nonya Soum 2007-04-25 ch 1, | abuseWow. I like it. It's beautiful and carries a good story. It's cool. Keep it up!! |