I really liked this. The way you broke the lines is a bit choppy, but I'm sure you meant that. Also, I don't care for the italicized lines in the middle - they sound like lines from a bad pop song (no offense), and I'd suggest making them ... sweeter?

But overall, I loved the premise and some individual lines were really touching. :)

Cheers!

Beautiful.

I laughed at the title, if it's any consolation. _ Lovely. Argh! Another favorite...

*hearts* If I had favourites, I would place this poem on them. Now, what do you bet FP will chop off my review?

You poem is a very good length, it's not too short, yet it doesn't waffle on for hours, making people lose interest halfway through. You use very effective description to describe the scenes and feelings of the girl, and the last stanza is particularly moving as it describes unrequited love, without ever stating that she loved him, as did others. That is the way you can tell apart a good poet from the bad ones - and as you can hint things like that, you are one of the good ones _

Just a few quick things ) I respect your decision not to use punctuation in poems, but then it is a bit confusing when your stanzas will carry on as one long sentence with the use of a lot of conjunctions - you can't help but think "woah, so many ideas and I can't get all of them in at first!" Because your poems are so full of meaning, you could try shorter stanzas, such as the fist one - the second last one had too many conjunctions.

Thank you for reviewing my poem! I hope you keep writing, you are definately an excellent author!

Sakura

Wow. This is good. I would tell you to puntuate, but I read your bio, so I won't. The thing that really gets me is that I can totally relate. There seems to be this one person who I may only be infatuated with because of his music, but either way, he doesn't seem to notice.

wow, this is so complex...

His hands danced across the

Black and white keys until

She was almost perfectly sure

They had faded into gray

best part

i kind of hated the words "baby" in the part inside the quotation marks...kind of takes away the ethereal-"ness" of the character...

still, you did a very good job...

ug. im going to stop review after this so that i can stop making a fool of myself with my infatuation with your writing. let me jut tell you that you are my hero. funny, i dont know a thing about you, but this is what i can only dream of being someday.

Whoa, I love it. Especially the lines "His hands danced across the/Black and white keys until/She was almost perfectly sure/They had faded into gray" The description is vivid and beautiful. I love it.

Falcon

wow. got say this: you're an amazing writer.

i adore it. it's not my kind of poem at all but as soon as i started reading it just struck me as unbelievably perceptive & powerful. i don't know why you say your poetry is typical teenage outbursts - i haven't seen anything this poignant on FP for a long time. the last stanza is just gorgeous, and the imagery is amazing. please don't ever stop writing

kudos to you i am a pianist myself so i know firsthand what its like and u did an amazing job bravo

i really like it.

oh me gosh. I think this is my favorite poem of yours.

I adore it...

So lovely and wonderfull.

(no bad words.)

love,

Insane Rass.

You have officially earned your place on my favorite authors list. I absolutely love this poem and its effective use of enjambment.

amazing.

ps. thanks for the review