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xxxmusic is lifexxx 2008-08-01 ch 1,	abuseAW! That was SO COOT!! I understand David's reaction to it all, I mean... Ur best friend and ur DAD? That would totally suck! But they love each other, and it's so FRIGGEN CUTE!
Broken Wrist 2008-07-24 ch 1,	abuseI loved it, I absolutey loved it. These are the best type of stories.
cherubicka 2008-07-15 ch 1,	abuseI haven't read much shota. I don't hate it but I don't like it either. I didn't really feel for Ty and Darrin. I get the "wrongness" and "rightness" of their situation. But there is something really hollow about the whole thing...they claim to love each other for each other and yet around every paragraph the "age difference" dilemma is being underlined. So much that I started looking for it through out the rest of the story. I get the reality; what they're doing IS risky, but for two people IN LOVE it should have been the most natural feeling in the world. There's a difference between understanding your circumstances and letting it direct your love life: - was this man his lover, his stand-in father, or his sugar-daddy... -NONONO Ty stop thinking about stuff you're supposed to NOT care about- Maybe everyone's bitching made them extra aware of what they were doing? Maybe that was your intention and it just didn't register? I don't know. It frustrated me. On the other hand...I really really really enjoyed your characterization of David. Despite the lovers, to me he's what really grounds this story. A minor role bearing a major job. I LOVE IT. He's the best friend who encourages the union in the beginning and the one who tries to tear it all down at the end. Perfect. Up and down. Start and finish. Like life. He's that kind of character. Unlike Ty and Darrin who move through the story knowing who they are and that they want each other, (that gives them direction, somewhere to GO) David is weaker because he seems less sure, he fails to understand their relationship in the end, he loses himself and does some terrible things for it...because he's human. It doesn't matter how brave the protagonists are, the most flawed characters are the most real and I love them. It's nostalgic too, because David is reminiscent of every guy friend that's ever been close to me growing up. Whenever he shows up in the story I instantly GET what he's all about no matter how little he says and does. I understand him. And I know this is a story about Ty and Darrin who overcome a probably very serious problem...but even by the time it ended I was STILL waving the DAVIDxTY flag.
Saint-Weasel 2008-06-30 ch 1,	abuseTalk about unconditional. I'm still trying to look through the story, but I'm pretty sure I'm not succeeding. Ok but, I totally get your style now. I figure it's Milk. Don't ask. It just feels like it, liquidy, creamy and only really effective with something else. (like, i can't drink milk alone) That's my only advice is that you should put more into this story (more of something sharp, perhaps, like fish bone, or a thumb tack, what am i even saying) so that there's this tension, this sandpaper effect. What I mean is, it IS romance, so it being milk is perfectly fine. But I'm not your average reading soft romances type, not even soft music. I like things hard, vulgar, comedic... But me, I'm an audience you probably don't get, so keep it up. (: Meh, If you read anything I write, I wonder what you'd think of it... I'm a bad reviewer, lol.
endless void 2008-05-30 ch 1,	abuseThis is really good piece of writing. That's all I can really say right now. :faves:
GlassoWater 2008-05-28 ch 1, anon.	abuseLoved this one too! It was a bit awkward with a grown man + teenager, but you pulled it off rather well. =D Keep up the great work!
D's Silly G 2008-05-27 ch 1,	abusethat was sweet, i like what you did with the storm.
music-is-luv 2008-05-23 ch 1,	abuseMan, that is SO fucked, dude. I mean, poor Ty and 'Dare'. Tsk, tsk. Damn homophobes. Nice story, but it's so sad. Oh! And by the way, my dad is SO older than you. He's like...54 or something.
Felinity 2008-05-14 ch 1,	abusecool story, sad he lost his job but at least their happy now :)
SlaughterGod 2008-04-19 ch 1,	abuseoh my god, i loved this! it was so good! and i love m/m with an older person and a minor, so it was perfect. thanks!
Elkica 2008-02-27 ch 1,	abuseTo tell you the truth I don't like stories about minors and older man. It just doesn't click with me. But this story was very nicely done. The way the flashbacks and the Ty's travel flowed together and the way the last paragraph has that positive note in it. Very, very nice.
KnittingKneedle 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseokay, first impressions first...I was drawn in by a seemingly non conventional summary. The first part seemed to give away too much, telling and not showing. The friendship between David and Ty was cute in the itallics part, but I think Ty should have been more than just a little nervous about telling his friend he is gay. It was pretty awkward to read some of it, and I think that the dialogue could do with a few more tags...some of the words don't have enough weight behind them so the emotion isn't explored. I liked your descriptions, but to me there weren't nearly enough of them...overall interesting story with an interesting concept
MistressELEMENT 2008-01-07 ch 1,	abuseOMGosh this is adorable! i think i've read this at least 4 times or started at least. and each time, i never finished it. i went on a rampage tryin to look for it. then finally one day i found it. and i still didn't finish it. and i have THE WORST MEMORY EVER! so i didn't remember that you wrote it, so now i was just lookin at your stories and i found it agen! YAY! lol now i've finished it and this is adorable but it sucks about how david took the whole bff dating dad thing...yea i would probably react the same way. but i don't have a bff...and the closest friend i have to a bff is the biggest homophobe ever. i do kno one kid thats like a bff that's gay tho, too. lol. wow bad visual.kk, i loved this. later! X's, -E
maggiepyro101 2007-12-22 ch 1,	abusecute
True.Randomness 2007-11-27 ch 1,	abuseSuch an angs story. I can't tell if I liked it or not though.

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