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| Harmonic Discord 2008-06-15 ch 1, | abuseStraight from the Review Marathon (link in profile!) I really liked this - it was cheerful and perky and brought a smile to my face. The ending was clever - loved the humor. (You really like dogs, don't you?) My one criticism is that you use "their" a lot when it should be "he" or "she" - for example: A singer opens their mouth wide and sings their songs, Since "singer" is singular, I think it should be "his" mouth and "his" songs. Or change it to "singers" plural. |
| Drallimer 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abusethis definitely touches on an important issue. I like how you kind of alternate from different personalities but it gets a bit repetitive after a while. i really like the ending because arguments do tend to drag on and then you end up repeating your points and it becomes like a vicious cycle of argument then your stuck there, needing to go to the bathroom but not wanting to leave because you don't want to see rude or seem like your running away! anyways, good job on it, it's got a very good rhythm. |
| Meilanu 2007-07-10 ch 1, | abuseThanks for reviewing my story (: I love this poem~! I'm not very good with poems myself, but I could totally agree with this one :D good job (: |
| Ivory Taint 2007-06-03 ch 1, | abuseVery true. I liked the message. |
| Morte d'Amour 2007-05-24 ch 1, | abuseVery nice! I enjoyed reading this very much, and it's definitely true. What I enjoyed the most was the tone and your view of differing opinions. Basically, everyone has an opinion; we should respect opinions other than our own, but is arguing about them so necessary and important? Good job with this! |
| Striped Candycane 2007-05-21 ch 1, | abuseVery, very true. You represent the different opinions really well, and they flow nicely. The rhyming isn't forced, but natural. This also has a voice that rings out clearly, especially with the last line. Favourite verse: "While a silent author may never speak at all." |
| soccerfreak18 2007-05-20 ch 1, | abuseThis is so true. I liked the ending line and how you go from one thing to another. good job keep writing |
| SirScott 2007-05-12 ch 1, | abuseYou make a lot of good points in this poem and I'll leave it at that. ~SirScott |
| DarkBlysse 2007-05-10 ch 1, | abuseMy grammar sense is tingling! "An optimistic can find"--That should be 'optimist' and not 'optimistic.' Man, I wish more people had the sense to believe and practice what you're trying toget across with this. So what if we don't agree? Let's respect each other and talk about something else. Geez. |
| sin olvido 2007-05-08 ch 1, | abuseSo true. A good poem... though I can't really find anything either good or bad to say about it. |
| All Alone With Her Thoughts 2007-04-30 ch 1, | abuseAgreed. Nice poem. Thanks for the review! Rowan. |
| R. Sharmayne 2007-04-26 ch 1, | abuseHaha! Wise. |