Interesting addition. Nice work. Have a great day.

Twilight Starr

Good start. Nice work. Good luck with writing, this story, and life.

Twilight Starr

The writing in this is terrible. Almost every sentence is a run on and lacks proper revision. After importing the footage I turn my music down to she if the coast is clear, for example, has a noticeable and pretty unlikely typo. Paige wasn't properly introduced either. If I wasn't paying attention, which I was, I would've wondered who she was and when she came into the story. Anyhow.. Yes..that is all.