 MD Irvine 2007-08-31 . chapter 1i read this and although I didn't realize what it was about till the end, i agreed that it is sad but true how we really never appreciate our life, family and friends until tragedy strikes.
I wanted to comment on the beginning as well" 32 lives cut short 32 stories that didn't end ... " you have it all on one line and i think you meant to have the *32 stories..* start on the next line.
I don't know what else to say here, I have never written poetry and not sure I'm critiquing right. |
 d1ng089 2007-07-17 . chapter 1damn, dude. that shit makes you think. good poem. took till the last line for me to realize what its message was, and that last line hits ya!
havent talked to you in a long time! this is bakedo, man! made a new account and started writing again :D
i see you're writing a new alpha squadron story! i shall R&R when i get a few minutes to sit :)
-peace |