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| Meepness 2008-06-10 ch 1,  | abuseThe poem was great, and the verse was perfect! |
| you_no_me 2007-11-10 ch 1, anon. | abuseSweet! I love this one too. Awesome work. |
| Jeannie-Redd 2007-11-05 ch 1, | abuseI love this. It's so simple but so VERY true. God's grace is something that we should all be thankful for. Good job ~Jeannie-Redd |
| STORMPAW 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseI love this one as well. Keep Writing |
| LittleDoe 2007-08-18 ch 1, | abuseI really like ths poem. You have an amazing gift from the LORD, and it is wonderful to see you using it for his glory. I like how you always have a verse at the end of your poems. God Bless you. ~LittleDoe |
| JC-Saved-Me 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abuseAmen to that! Wow, its been a long while since I've properly surfed Fictionpress! Ha, I'm glad to be back! xRachx |
| simpleplan13 2007-08-04 ch 1, | abuseI like this.. very nice |
| Midnight Doorman 2007-07-09 ch 1, | abuseIn the first stanza, I thought the meter was a little awkward, and the rhyming was almost too much, but by the end of the second stanza, I fell back into a feeling I recognized. The poem conveys its message excellently. |
| Luna Turner 2007-07-08 ch 1, | abuseI liked this one alot. A preacher once said "Never be afraid to take the extra step to save someone by telling them about God's love." That applies to this poem and "Glory Land". Great job. |
| TylerB 2007-06-27 ch 1, | abuseIt's the only way to be saved right? Beautifully written and a powerful statment. Keep posting your works Needa! Don't disappear on me. |
| Jay-Ling 2007-05-01 ch 1, | abuseA beautifully written poem. I admire your courage to spread the Word so easily and I hope you realize that your poetry has made an impact on my life. Amazing write, keep it up :D God bless, ~Jay-Ling. |
| MikaelaBanes 2007-04-30 ch 1, | abuseWonderful poem!! Very powerful and beautiful!! Carry on the great work! ^_^ |
| Scottish Princess 2007-04-28 ch 1, | abuseHey, I saw your comment on my songs and I just had to read your poetry. I must say, I feel flattered to have such a prestigious author comment on my songs. You have true talent and it's even better that you are a Christian! I'm adding you and your story to my faves list! Well done and keep up the good work! |
| The Postscript 2007-04-28 ch 1, | abuseA great write in need of just a few small corrections: in the 1st stanza, second line, do you mean graciously instead of gracelessly? And in the 3rd stanza, first line, do you mean presence instead of presents? I would also try reworking the order of words so that lines make better sense. For example, "I once was sinking in an evil sea/begging the Lord to hear my plea/and through grace He saved me." A lot of lines in here are said in a passive voice. You have lots of great thoughts, though, so don't be afraid to really let them stand out - to allow them to be said with direction and heart! Wonderful write that really hits home since my religion mainly preaches that we are saved by grace alone. Your words are such an inspiration! God has blessed you with amazing talent. Keep writing, k. |
| AuthorNinjaEarth 2007-04-28 ch 1, | abuseGreat work Needa! It's good to see you writing again. Excellent work! |