Moondog Dozier
2007-05-08
ch 1,  | abuseI like how you've woven the familiar phrase, "misery loves company", into this, and it fits so perfectly with the tone that you've set earlier in the work. The sound, and the pace of the sound that you've created really draws the reader in. By using the "Lifeguard", as an actuality and a representation of a larger emotional "Lifeguard" at work, gives the reader a duality to concentrate on, as we all need "Lifeguards", in the physical at the beach, at the pool way, and in a metaphorical day to day emotional way. Very well crafted. Thought provoking. MD:77. |
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