As I just told you, the second chapter is twisting. Of cours tat is the way it would hapen but still, I haven't done twisting in a while. ::))

Rat man rocks. It gives a fun way of viewing what happens without giving much away. ::)) and its fun.

A real nice touch up Some minior things amiss but overall to me you get five stars over easy. Nice work

Intresting, well written and very good, espically the rat's POV, keep up the good work

I loved the first chapter, from the rat's point of view. But it just seems like it was too much of a coincidence that Xun Klahan just happened to end up in the same cell as his uncle. Perhaps it will be explained later, at the moment it seems very unlikely. I look forward to seeing what will happen next. :3