it's a nice concept, though a little short to really write in depth about such an interesting topic. i would give some constructive criticism here, but i don't think i can do it fairly - it's too short and bare for me to say anything.

basically what i'm trying to say is... please continue! it would be great if you expanded on this and made it into a story... even if just a longer one-shot. hopefully you will continue, since this is a promising start. :D

-Lefty

I like the concept, i think once you develop it a little more it will really bloom