i love it! its so nice, i love stories about the moon! ( :

awesome short story. it is very sweet and poetic. talk to you later.

This completely blew me over. It's so good! You described the love for each other really well, and how they are so compatible with each other. Also, the last sentence OWNED! The pictures you drew with words were really, really good. Write more stuff like that, yes?

-mavis (RF)

that's kinda cool, i like it.

sounds very sweet and well described:)

wow! i have to say. phenomenal. amazing!!

u make it flow. it seems like a poem cause there's nobody talking..

really cool! this one is k=just descriptive. i felt it was soothing kind. the quiet kind. ;)

go hide in a corner...just kidding!
I like this a lot, it's really nice that you personified the sun and the moon into a lovely story.

Go hide in a corner cause' I have to scream 'That's so CUTE!'. People say it's romantic and everything but for this kind of stories, I say it's cute. =) Well done!

:] aww. that was awsome.

aw i really like this! It's simple and sweet and about true love...what more could u ask for?

i really love ur quote in ur bio "true love is when you say "no" and he says "good night" instead of "goodbye"" - that's really sweet

im also a romance book junkie lol

Well done! A truly enjoyable piece.

I like how you personified the sun and the moon. Or is it the other way around? It's open to interpretatioin, and I find that that's beauty of this composition. You captured all the characters (sun, moon, husband, and wife) so concisely and united them so the meshed wonderfully.

That was a very fluid story. Congratulations.

very creative! i liked this quite a bit.

The flow is really nice, and I like the abstract qualities. Put simply, this is beautiful.

Oh! This was so poetic! I thought I was about to cry at how lovely it was- unless you stole this, I'm going to so kick you butt from the Sun all the way to Pluto- even though it's not a planet any more! Wah!
Anyways, if this was your work- you're such a poet that you need to write more of this.