Hi, I found this work through ‘pay it forward’, and decided to give it love, because of its lack of reviews. I am glad I did so. This piece has exceptional content, and from what I have read, so far in this chapter as well the makings of something truly special.I would only encourage, you to increase the length of your chapters, and watch out for at times your too prim and proper choice of word usage—a slurring drunk would be more colloquial. The basic areas of writing are no problem for you, so keep it up. It is still a bit early for me to add you to any of my lists, but I will keep checking on this through the forum. I think with the next chapter… I will decide whether to add you and continue further on.

I do like the idea of somebody telling a story while inebriated, though I think it sounds a little too formal, especially since the narrator is drunk.

JT