Goodness, what powerful emotion is woven here with the simplest words and phrases. Fluid and riveting and very much evocative. My stomach started twisting on itself midway through. Favorites.

Very heart-wrenching. Unrequited love is a topic that a lot of people can relate to but you took it to a whole new level. I'm also quite fond of how you made it sound fatalistic.

Bravo. This is going on my favorties list.

It's a nice one shot, but there are a few choice wordings that stuck out to me:

"It’s only a horizontal movement his head [..]" That's one. I'm not sure what's wrong with it, just that it sounds kind of awkward. Or maybe you just wanted to have the reader put some thought into it, because I actually shook my head and catalogued it as a horizontal movement... hm... -ponders-

Anyway! It's a good narrative, has a nice flow and is bittersweet without being overly dramatic. Good work.

D: No. Why? That guy's so mean. Why does he mess with people so badly?

I feel so sorry for the main character. Great story. I loved it. It had a lot of emotion. :)

Another cross-posted, eh?

It's alright...the same as it was over at ff, only with selective editing.

I, though, still know it's Kenneh...the many deaths thing, I think. Don't know how you COULD change it, but...*shrugs*