Some parts of this could be almost be turned into a song; not all of it, be there are certain parts that seem very like song lyrics.

"I’m just a mixed-up girl, in this really mixed-up world." - And that, of course, is the chorus ;)

I like this very much, there's cool imagery and feeling behind your words. I agree with the 'everything's a lie' line; it does feel like that sometimes!

Good job!

ME TOO! Excellent work.