Now chapter 2 makes more sense (what is wrong with me, I am reading material backwards today). I'd say the two together equal poetic justice. And I like the theme of the rain, which in my opinion, remains a source of depression. It's very cool how you made it a two-part poem, wait... it is just a two-part poem right (Oh, I guess it's to read more of your work, gotta play catch- up).

This is good. What a sad, yet unique poem. I've never gone through like that, but I can imagine what a person in a relationship is going through when they find out that the other person is cheating. When you watch enough reality and you talk to a variety of people, you start to develop some sort of idea of how it must have felt.

Ah I just realised I hadn't read this yet! haha it's good :)

Pain... that is what this one makes me think of. I knew the rain was a symbol of depression, you just clarified that. Anyway, the poem was good, but (indeed, sometimes there has to be a but) it seems like all the other poems about a broken and broken love. Maybe I just don't know what I'm talking about because I never knew this kind of love, but yeah it sounds like all the rest of them. Please don't hate me if I end your review like this, because its not you, its just the fact that I've heard a lot of poetry about how a someone feels when someone else or another breaks up with them. Like I said, maybe I just don't know that feeling, or maybe I'm just jealous that at least they had someone. But your not a shrink, so pay no mind to my pleas of loneliness.

I like the ending...it's funny. And come to think of it, it needed to be continued. I love it :)

I really like this, espesicially how you used the flower vase comparison. :D

Holy crap. I've got 965 hits on my profile page. But probably, and this better be the case, half of those hits are from me because I like to see if my poem was posted right away or if I'll have to wait. And because I love going back and reading stories about Sam and Brett, ha ha. Sorry. Why do you always have to update your profile? You know I'll check out atleast the first few lines and, well, that's just evil. But as for the poem. Sitting in the rain. Don't wait to long because you might catch the flu, ha ha. No.. I was going to say something, but I forgot..So..whatever...ha ha. My little sister just tried to pour her coffee into my cup.. Yeah..

"But I'd rather it be sooner than later

Because this bench is pretty cold

And I'm pretty wet

From sitting in the rain"

I loved this line. This may seem a bit gay but, I (being a guy) have actually felt this way before and that is why I liked this so much. I have to read some more of ur stuff.


-Twilight Wolf


By The By; I'm first review-ee, woopie!