Ah, so great :) Your writing is amazing. Please update soon!

~Carm~

aww, it was so short!
O'-'O

Wow, really great chapter. Full of everything that makes me adore this story. I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to read it!

Can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter :)

~Carm~

...She's in denial
O.o
o.O
^^;

Heart-wrenching ending!

You're doing a phenomenal job, and I really can't wait for more :)

~Carm~

O.O oh, poor Selent. But I still love him!

Second paragraph in this chapter you're missing a word. It says 'in front of the door her room'. That's it on the errors as far as I can tell. I kinda wish it was longer though; I likeses Selent's point of view! You get to get inside his head a little bit! Even if it is a bit strange. But then, I like strange, which is one of the reason's I like him!

Okay, I'm done now.

^^;

This story makes me smile. Keep up the amazingness :)

~Carm~

**glares at stupid log in thing** hmm...okay, so they know his name...how come no one recognizes it then?
oh well
haha, she's gone crazy, poor girl. poor kids.
ahem...near the beginning, did you mean 'hollow' instead of 'hallow'? 'cause it says hallow, and it is way too late to be up right now, and do update soon! i wanna know what happens next!

Lovely job. You've got a serious talent!

Keep it up. I'm loving it :)

~Carm~

dun dun DUN! few spelling errors but... can't remember where -*smack self*-

my liking for the silly crazy man just keeps growing. Selent is awesome...

Dun dun DUN! Such cruel people they seem to be. There were a few sentences that were kinda odd, but ugh, I can't remember where. My brain hurts. I'm gonna fall asleep. G'night...


-*passes out*-

yay, an update. hmm. how rude. shame on those people. something i noticed... you refer to that legna dude as a female, near the beginning... or maybe you used the wrong name? just something i noticed...

hope writing this has become a little bit easier. it's a good story

Hey!

As always, this is still my favorite of all your stories. It is a joy to read, and this chapter was especially well written! I love the atmosphere of fear that Karel has to face. I can feel her struggling with herself and her fear, trying to be reasonable, but terrified and disgusted by the very person she's trying to protect...

Great chapter, once more! Can't wait to here more, so please don't give up on this. I'll try to review more, not just tell you what I think in person, I promise!

Yay, an update! No, don't stop!

Sometimes taking a break from a story helps, when you start losing interest. It may also help if you enable the anonymous review thing, that way more people can leave comments and all that happy stuff. I tend to lose interest in my stories as well, and when that happens, I just go and write on another for a while, and then come back later. Doesn't always work, but it does help, and if you're an artsy person, sometimes creating something based on the story helps as well.

Your story is good. It has a few spelling and grammar issues, but what story doesn't? Your profile says you have no real plot or plan for this story. If that's the case, then coming up with a random scene and working towards it may help. Frankly, I do that all the time. It usually works.

I keep using the word 'help'. I'm getting on my own nerves. That's sad.

Don't just drop the story though. That's sad too. Maybe not for you, but it would be for me. I like Stillness! He's like, crazy in a completely understandable way! Does that make sense? Mm... I think this is the longest review I've ever written.

Anyway. Losing interest? Take a break, draw a picture, whatever works, but don't just drop the story. Please? Metaphorical squash and cookies may become involved if you do, and that's a bad, bad thing...

I like the narrator's voice and the way this is written.
There are a couple that aren't right. You used "flea" as in the insect, rather than "flee" to run. Also, the plural of "custom" has no "e".