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| fatbird33 2008-07-09 ch 1,  | abusegreat flow and rhyming |
| Lady of the Mirror 2008-05-29 ch 1, | abuseYou have a beautiful way with words! :) This poem is so happy and carefree! Wonderful job! I loved how you ended the lullaby. ~~Lady of the Mirror~~ |
| Kisei 2008-04-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is really pretty. The rhythm flows smoothly, and you have a talent for rhyming I could never manage. :) It sounds fake and forced when I try, but this is natural and elegant. |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-04-21 ch 1, | abuseWow! This is amazing! The rhythm and flow are perfect! Great job, keep it up! =) --Katrina Zeffirelli |
| Katalystic 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abuseWhat a lovely poem. I really enjoyed the rhythm and word choice. "May dream-raveled meadows elude cloying sleep To hold the young daybreak and rise from the deep" is my favourite part. Fantastic work =] |
| New life for the Undead 2008-04-14 ch 1, | abusei like what you did with this it really did paint a picture in my head of what you were discribing good work i enjoyed it |
| One Big Soap Opera 2008-04-02 ch 1, | abuseFirst off, thank you so very much for reviewing my poem. First EVER review, which means something to me. Anyways, I love this lullaby, it really does put you at ease and also gets you optimistic when you're not feeling right. |
| Thenardier 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseThis really is a fantastic lullaby. It puts me at ease |
| M.J. Dawn 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseVery pretty, it painted images in my mind. So great job lol, it's very lullaby'istic'. --Marie Jane |
| SEMMU 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseYou have a beautiful way with words. Considering that this is a new day (only after reading your poem), I think I'll go do something productive. Maybe, just maybe, I'll be nice to someone, too. Thanks for sharing. Write on! |
| Purpose 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseImage-ladened. The words put pictures in my head and frankly I enjoy the pictures. I especially loved the last section 'May dream-raveled meadows [...] and in the dawn's arm.' That was probably the most vivid of the images I got out of this poem. Very well written. |
| ChaosMan 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseWord of advice - if the title includes the word 'Lullaby', don't read the poem at three o'clock in the morning...lol. It was a wonderful poem, the rythm fits perfectly and gently guides you through. I love the way the imagery is strong enough to let you feel the different temperatures - starting off cold under gray clouds and in dim shadows, then moving to the crisp cool of dawn, before finally up comes the sun and we fall into the warmth of dawn's arms. Beautiful. |
| Astrum Viscus 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseI love your imagery. It's very intense and almost melodic. I love how what you write flows almost effortlessly, as well. It's wonderful. |
| Blissfully Sarcastic 2008-03-18 ch 1, | abuseWhoa, that was...that was...whoa. Finally, a person who can rhyme, and do it well! The flow was amazing; none of the rhymes were forced. The wording was brilliant, and I -- honestly -- have no suggestions. It's just...too...perfect for me to give suggestions on. I'm sorry. Keep up the good work, okay? |
| BatsintheBellfry 2008-03-16 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful imagery; I could almost hear the tune in the rhythm. |