great flow and rhyming

You have a beautiful way with words! :) This poem is so happy and carefree! Wonderful job! I loved how you ended the lullaby.

Lady of the Mirror

This is really pretty. The rhythm flows smoothly, and you have a talent for rhyming I could never manage. :) It sounds fake and forced when I try, but this is natural and elegant.

Wow! This is amazing! The rhythm and flow are perfect! Great job, keep it up! )

-Katrina Zeffirelli

What a lovely poem.

I really enjoyed the rhythm and word choice.

"May dream-raveled meadows elude cloying sleep

To hold the young daybreak and rise from the deep"

is my favourite part.

Fantastic work ]

i like what you did with this it really did paint a picture in my head of what you were discribing

good work i enjoyed it

First off, thank you so very much for reviewing my poem. First EVER review, which means something to me. Anyways, I love this lullaby, it really does put you at ease and also gets you optimistic when you're not feeling right.

This really is a fantastic lullaby. It puts me at ease

Very pretty, it painted images in my mind. So great job lol, it's very lullaby'istic'. -Marie Jane

You have a beautiful way with words. Considering that this is a new day (only after reading your poem), I think I'll go do something productive. Maybe, just maybe, I'll be nice to someone, too.

Thanks for sharing. Write on!

Image-ladened. The words put pictures in my head and frankly I enjoy the pictures. I especially loved the last section 'May dream-raveled meadows [...] and in the dawn's arm.' That was probably the most vivid of the images I got out of this poem. Very well written.

Word of advice - if the title includes the word 'Lullaby', don't read the poem at three o'clock in the morning...lol.

It was a wonderful poem, the rythm fits perfectly and gently guides you through. I love the way the imagery is strong enough to let you feel the different temperatures - starting off cold under gray clouds and in dim shadows, then moving to the crisp cool of dawn, before finally up comes the sun and we fall into the warmth of dawn's arms.

Beautiful.

I love your imagery.

It's very intense and almost melodic. I love how what you write flows almost effortlessly, as well.

It's wonderful.

Whoa, that was...that was...whoa.

Finally, a person who can rhyme, and do it well! The flow was amazing; none of the rhymes were forced.

The wording was brilliant, and I - honestly - have no suggestions. It's just...too...perfect for me to give suggestions on. I'm sorry.

Keep up the good work, okay?

Beautiful imagery; I could almost hear the tune in the rhythm.