I've spoken to you like five times since this was published and you had not mentioned it once!? For shame! Heh. Anywho... I thought it was pretty cool, very interesting. Though I think you mentioned it vaguely to me in one conversation, but you did not believe you were going to upload it.

You're lucky I was just checking out if your story had been updated, or I would've never got to review. I don't know if you would consider it lucky though.

Constructively speaking, I would say use capitals at the beginning of every new... sentence-esq part. Such as putting capital S's on all the Somethings. But other than that, smashing job and I would like to see more from you.

Personally, I like: "Darling, I never said I loved you, I sure as hell never said I cared! I never even pretended, you were always 'just there!'" There nicely worded... that and I like the word darling for some reason. XP Don't ask me why.

Laters.

This was pretty good for your first attempt at a song in a while. Unfortunately, you had to make someone get hit by a car, so I laughed. You know I can't help it. As I'm doing this at 7 in the morning, I'm laughing more.

Anyways, it was pretty well structured. I don't get it though. if someone hurts somebody so bad, why do they still love them? Hell, I'd have kicked someone in the face; Not run out on the road to get smoked by a transport or something.

Kidding. I noticed there were a few missing punctuations thingies, like periods, but only a little, and when you go to another line, always start the new line with a capital, even if it is preceeded with a comma. It makes the lyrics look neater. Anyways, good job, and I'll be waiting for new stuff.

I liked this a lot. The rhyming was wonderful, and it flowed really well! Wonderful job.

This is actually really good. :] I like iit.
Even though it's a bit choppy and seems a bit forced at times,
it's still wonderful.

Love, Diiz.