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the naked civil servant 2008-02-10 ch 1,	abuseah, ah, ah "hanging low & obvious" "holes in the darkness" "flirting vibrations" "drawling despondence" "leak liquid glass" and of course... "you never were a diamond" how i love it. excessively. it has been some time since i have been so impressed by a poem that all i'm capable of doing is throwing lines back in the feeble guise of a review. truly adored.
three.word.lies 2007-11-02 ch 1,	abuseyou have talent. the last stanza makes me squirm with love.
painting andromeda 2007-08-28 ch 1,	abusei wanted a knife, or maybe just to use my hands to rip into your shadows and see if you would laugh (would you leak liquid glass?) or if you'd scream and bleed. Chilling. Beautiful.
recycle rhymes 2007-08-03 ch 1,	abusem love the line flirting vibrations - they flow very well together. keep on going!
smile for the sunshine 2007-07-30 ch 1,	abuseI loved this. It was...different. And if I got it right, beautiful. adds to favs
wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-07-09 ch 1,	abuseyou're so talented- it's incredible. you seriously need to be published in a journal or something. this was gorgeous, and more of a testimony to that fact.
lackluster 2007-06-11 ch 1,	abusei can understand the character you're describing so well...i think it's because i'm like that. just a little bit. the last stanza...brutal but honest and it's magnificent i must say. you absolutely astound me with your imagery and the sheer COLOR you add to your words. it's marvelous. great work.
fear-me-regardless 2007-06-08 ch 1,	abusedamn... just, damn... intensely romantic, lol. I liked this a lot, going on my favorites.
Bleached Roses 2007-05-27 ch 1,	abuseThe imagery here is so vivid and surreal, truly describing and empowering to the emotions you seem to convey. I agree with a previous reviewer, in stating that stanza four seems off, but.. overall, the poem is a masterpiece. It speaks of raw pain and realism, yet with maturity as well. I look forward to seeing more in the future.
no.peace.los.angeles 2007-05-26 ch 1,	abuseYou have some really interesting images in this - I love the lines "shook the wiring of my heart" and "would you leak liquid glass?" the most. It's mature and questioning and just wonderfully done. Keep writing! :)
dollface and her cancer 2007-05-17 ch 1,	abusethe last stanza is my favorite. there's a kind of cold thoughtfulness to it, instead of the violence you might otherwise associate with that imagery, that makes it so much more raw and real.
AboveTheSalt 2007-05-15 ch 1,	abuseyour imagery is vibrant and alive with passion. stanza 4 is missing this color and is therefore somewhat out of place. liquid glass, wiring of my heart, ice/smooth against my pupils, all of it... it's beautiful in an exquisite way, very delicate and yet harsh with the power of its content and connotations. i've missed reading your work. i hope to see more in the future.

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