This is interesting...I love the comparison of jazz with the relationship.

I'll admit that I came just because it said "jazz", but I don't know... This surprised me, as it's not what I expected. At ALL. It's got this intense feel, but overall it's just sort of confusing. It felt less like life than like love, or romance, or one of those. It's got a story, power, and still has flow and nice descriptions, which is very impressive in poetry. I like the line "And paralysis is a comfort". Again, while I don't really understand this, I think the writing style is interesting (very different from mine), making it more special (for me to read, at least). All in all, good job.