I love this, I really like how it flows, and hopw you tell the story.
It's kind of sad, but not self-pitying =)

what a perfect little scene.

"sometimes it’s nice to pretend that you’re more in love with me than you actually are"

how many times have I done that? a lot. have I ever managed to create something like this to describe it? nope.

beautiful.

Having nothing helpful to say, I'll just say that your work is always so admirable and
never disappointing.

Fantastic. I like the way it's almost unfinished, stops while the night is still going on. There's just something about your style that draws me in and I love it.

This feels so real & true. It made me sad.. especially the relationship of the first line to the title. Very nice..

I like it.