all in all a good closing piece. it seems to sum up the attitudes of the previous poems. good rhythem again, except for the line "Give the critics what they want"
too many sylables, in comparison with the rest.
the "its time to play" was very well handled. that is something i have a very hard time with but that you seem to have no issues with at all. -

first off: i can't tell what the chorus is. you need the make that clear. the piece was overall good though... only thing i would change is to make the series of repeated solo-words condensed... would make a better poetic presentation i think.

excellent... best one since heinous. i imagine this song played slowly... the repetition in the beginning set the pace for the rest of the peace. love the repectition, especially the transition from "jaded" to "hated," and the last two lines of the chorus are powerful.

i wish i knew the tune too... its a shaky poem. much of what i write is a song, and when i read it as a poem it sounds much weaker. the chorus is great though. love the line "** reasons to die." people often dwell on one and not the other.

this poem would have been better if i had read before "heinous." the rhythm in this poem begins very similar to heinous, but then gets really broken up in the middle. the rhyming is a little off in the end too. it had a very strong beginning, which you could have, should have, kept going with.

well i don't know who you are talking about in this poem, but the poem itself is awesome. definite page scroller. would be a page turner but, you know...
anyway loved the rhyming scheme, the rhythem, everything. no critisism.

Crazy, but very intresting. Keep in mind, when I say crazy, I mean it in a good way!