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| Alexz Lynn 2007-05-26 ch 3,  | abuseMrs. Fields... works at a bakery... Very clever. I bet she makes wonderful cookies. :) |
| Alexz Lynn 2007-05-26 ch 4, | abuseA few things to think about: 1) There are grammar issues in all of the chapters - tense changes, punctuation problems, spelling errors, etc. 2) The cases are too short. Refer to comments made in previous review. 3) I love the characters, however, and the idea of the younger "agents." I think it would be better if it they were on one case, and there was one story with many chapters. Finally, this thought is just personal preference, but how can she continue to date a guy who wanted to help her lose her virginity? |
| Alexz Lynn 2007-05-26 ch 2, | abuseA younger Nancy Drew hits the 21st century, but this time she has a team and connections to the FBI. This was cute, but too short and not descriptive enough. It lacked the charm of a mystery because you couldn't piece any clues together for yourself (which is the fun part of mystery stories, I might add(. Everything was explained at the end, so it made it a tad uninteresting. It was cute, though. |
| Raymond Lamar Gilstrap 2007-05-09 ch 1, | abuseThis seems pretty interesting so I will check out more when I get the chance. I read your profile and like how you got your penname. Chapter Two of Beneath the Glass Lake is posted so check it out and I will be back to read this story soon. Until Next Time . . . . |
| Carmel March 2007-05-06 ch 3, | abuseThat was fun to read :) I liked the homour you incorporated into the mission. Good job, and I can't wait for more! ~carm~ |
| Carmel March 2007-05-05 ch 2, | abuseWow, I love this. Your writing is refreshingly unique. Good job on this :) And I think it should be one story with different chapters. Just my opinion, though! ~carm~ |