Wonderfully written. It's so emotion filled that the reader can't help but feel what the character is feeling. You write very well.

heyy! i really like this! too bad its a oneshot. wait..is it?

-Michelle

I like the sort of thought process-y feel here. Much of what happens in the story are things I can identify with, so it made it much more enjoyable. Major props.

Aww, I really liked this. It kind of reminded me of the vignettes Sandra Cisneros (sp??) writes. I liked all the emotion in this piece, keep writing!

Wow ... this is surprisingly good (surprising because I usually prefer chapter stories, more than shortlets. The internal, almost stream of consciousness style works very well here.

Thanks :)