Yup, it may be kinda grim but it's a fabulous poem nonetheless. =)

as they say you painted a picture with words, and i loved the fact that i FELT the despair in the words as i was reading.

Wow.
Grim - Shrim.


This is amazing.
I really enjoyed your imagery
Don't change anything - seriously.

The part with chains was genius and "The tears I shed turn to stone"

WOW.
Your venting produced something great.

I adored the last lines,

"escape is but a promise/it vanished along with my innocence"

It was dark and morbid and the imagery fit right in with that theme.

Wow. This is the one I was waiting for. The darkness. The grim hope of tomorrow feel. This is the work that aptly suits you being "a dark ray of hope". I like it. I really like it. But hopefully, next time you'll write something like this, you won't be venting out problems. You'd just be saying or writing these types of works because you want to. Keep it up! :D