Reviews for Reason Aside - FictionPress.com

Reviews For: Reason Aside

Isca 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseAn interesting love affair. The words in brackets were a nice touch.
Getuie 2008-05-16 ch 1,	abuseThe words in brackets were a wonderful addition to a piece that wouldn't have been the same without them. Lots of depth in Jay's story immediately brought connection... though not quite as much with Lance. Being as cynical as I am, the ending didn't quite gel with me... and the lyrics were a bit off... they said quite a lot and you could image, for a moment, that neither character could convey the essence of what they were feeling except through using lyrics but... I dunno. Just felt like it would've been better had they found something themselves. In all, very good. Reason Aside definitely fits the piece more than Angst Galore ;)
KnittingKneedle 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuseWell I thought that this was just great, angst or no angst...my favourite part was, by far, the little words that you added in brackets...this actions spoke volumes about the character of Jay and why he and Lance didn't work out the first time. I thought it got a little cheesy towards the end, with the song lyrics and all- which sort of messed with the realism that you had to begin with, with the all too real break-down of a relationship. Nevertheless, the characterization in such a small piece of work is really commendable and I thought that you did a great job!
M. Massacre 2008-02-27 ch 1,	abuseThis is wonderful! ...I can't think of anything else. But really, amazing stuff.
The Sun and Shadow 2008-02-22 ch 1,	abuseI guess you warned me fairly about the angst factor in advance, but this was incredibly sad, even by my standards. I loved your usage of skillfully placed words in parenthesis through-out the piece. The added after thoughts really helped to convey the overall tone and emotion of the story, I believe. Nicely done. I will certainly be reading more of your work.
Curb Crasher 2007-12-18 ch 1,	abuseWell, I'm not a romantic, but this story makes me wish I were! And . . . I don't know if that's praise or not, but I'm pretty sure it is.
Kailum 2007-05-05 ch 1,	abuseWOW. I got tears in my eyes because of your story. That was REALLY good. And heart-wrenching. o_o And Jay should've known that Lance couldn't have meant it from the 'disbelieving anger' he had on his face when he just smiled and accepted it. That was also really sad... obvious denial of the truth :( Very good story, loved it.
Rock on an Ocean Shore 2007-05-05 ch 1,	abuseWhat a cute ending. Your characters have flaws and realistic characteristics, and I congratulate you on skillfully connecting the reader with them. :D My only suggestion regarding the characterization is to make Lance a bit more emotionless/detached when he meets Jay at the bar. Before they met, I was under the impression that Lance was much colder than how he presented himself at the bar. I liked that this story occurred over a period of time. It gave it a novel-ish feel and it could even be expanded to be more than a one-shot. Great job. I really liked this piece.

Return to Top