All I saw in this chapter was basically lists. It started out great and then you stop describing, stop explaining...and it was just lists. I understand that that might be the point, because she's feeling empty. But this is starting to piece together, and I like. A lot. You had better add to this or I'll break out into sobs and shrieks. Tehe.
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I would go to my “Auntie’s” house, but she has her own family to take care of.
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Auntie? That was very random.

The rest, though, was phenomenal. Truly, it was an amazing idea, an amazing way to describe things, and your word choice was just great. Oh darnet. I gave you blind praise. Maybe I'll critique something in the next chapter, but for now, I loved it.

Hey Dude, it's me Zan! Yup I got an account on this site. I might try out my story on here. Anyways, that was awesome. I loved it.