 Origin Of Catastrophe 2007-05-05 . chapter 1Some lines of your poem were very nice. Especially some of the imagery, like the first line. Other lines did not fit too well, and they overall went against the tone of your poem. For example, the usage of the word git, and your ending line "Infatuation sucks...", seemed a bit misplaced.
Overall good work, there is always room for improvement ^_^ |