Wow. This is an awesome depiction of the way some people think about vampires. Of course, I've been thinking about vampires way too much lately...
I didn't mind that it didn't rhyme, this poem didn't need it. Rhyming adds a rhythm to things, but some things don't need rhythm.
I love some of these lines... 'It was not my wish to destroy/ But my fate I cannot forego.' (By the way, the use of the word forego earns brownie points with me. I love words like that!)
The glass imagery is perfect for this poem.
Ah, now for some criticism... well, the only thing that bothered me was the periods. I just don't always get the use of them in poetry. I suppose that's a style thing, but I have to point out that some of the 'sentences' in this poem don't have periods at the ends, while others do.
Great job, though! :D

I picked up right away that it was a vampire. Not bad actually.

Love it, very dark and haunting. You portray the sadness and frustration about the bleak side of immortality extremely well.

Excellent. Your writing is very poetic You words just flow into each other. Good job on this :)

~carm~

I figured almost right off the bat that this was from a Vampire's point of view - you portrayed it well without common stereotypes...and your wording is pretty nifty. It makes you think.

Don't explain it at the end! I was having fun deciphring it. Oh well. You don't have to rhyme, as a matter of fact I really like your writing style when you don't. This poem could be one about war with the last two lines or fantasy with the two before that. This poem is versitile as is the speaker. Bravo and well done. Can't wait to read more


Surreal

nice! the next dante A.!