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Reviews For: Mine Robot

Nolan Robertson
2008-04-02
ch 1,
abuseI thought this story was very well written and provocative. You obviously have a strong interest in this kind of genre/plot. I think you should keep up with this sort of theme. I like to read creative interpretations of the future like this: man-machine interaction, technology, etc. Very cool. Keep it up!
GilanSalehi
2007-08-22
ch 4,
abuseVery good. I quick read, but very enjoyable. You write well, and the characters were developed pretty well for such a short story. Do you have anything else in the works that you are thinking of posting? I'd be interesting in reading that, too. Keep writing!
GilanSalehi
2007-08-22
ch 3,
abuseAsimov is getting some real play here. I think you should list the three Laws at the beginning of the first chapter so that readers who aren't familiar with Asimov can follow the plot a little better. I know them, but not everyone does.
This was a good chapter, and the puzzle pieces are beginning to fall into place. I don't understand what Samantha realizes at the end, but I guess that'll be answered in the next chapter. The odd reactions of the robots are throwing me off a little, but hopefully there'll be a good reason why they're acting so strangely.
GilanSalehi
2007-08-22
ch 2,
abuseDun dun dun! It sounds like LN8 has been tampered with... But by whom? The plot thickens...
No grammar or spelling mistakes to note, you have done a good job in that department. You do a good job with the dialogue as well, I think it's one of your strong suits. You make the robot sound a lot more human than a hunk of metal through the way it speaks, sometimes. Or perhaps it is just a human flaw that we all find the familiar in the alien (or robotic).
Good job on this one, I'm on to the next chapter.
GilanSalehi
2007-08-22
ch 1,
abuseInteresting premise. You do a good job characterizing how humans feel around robots: technically safe, but unsettled at a deep level. It's almost the way kids are scared of the dark: they know there's really nothing there, but can't shake the nagging feeling that something bad is. I like it so far. I'm on to the next chapter...
K. R. Ukido
2007-07-31
ch 4,
abuseIt's over?

Not fair!!

Well, it was definitely good. I liked it a lot, and I'll probably read it again. You sent a good message and really depicted robots as being... beings too.

Your explaination was flawless and left for no plot holes, a feat in itself; you ALSO kept it interesting, something my explainations never are. Altogether a good read.

Keep Writing!
~K. R. Ukido
K. R. Ukido
2007-07-31
ch 3,
abuseWhat? What makes sense?? I'm clueless :).

I actually haven't found anything to complain about since Chapter One... which is incredible for me since I LOVE to complain. Good chapter!

Keep writing!
~K. R. Ukido
K. R. Ukido
2007-07-31
ch 2,
abuseLN-8 is screwed up! I wonder who's doing that to him...?

Once again you've made me want to read more. I love the mystery so far, and the fact that you made the future believeable astounds me. That's hard to do. Great job!

Keep writing!
~K. R. Ukido
K. R. Ukido
2007-07-31
ch 1,
abuse...I'm impressed.

You've really caught my attention here--this was the perfect first chapter of what I'm sure will be a good story.

I noticed a few little nitpicky mistakes, but all in all the chapter was well-detialed, thought-oiut, consise, and a good read.

Keep writing!
~K. R Ukido
BlackCat939
2007-05-24
ch 4,
abuseWonderful! I don't really like Sci-fi, but you have changed my mind completely! Keep writing; you're very good at it.
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