Didn't realize how short it was so I managed to read it all before I had to leave.

Up until the final chapter I was trying to work out how the robot was manipulated - I mean it was obvious enough that it hadn't killed him.

The fact that he was used like a rooster in a cock fight had completely eluded me. Looking back on the story the clues were there - maybe not starkingly obvious, but there were clues that pointed it out.

Good work on it!

Interesting ethical quandary that you display in this story. And this is only just gathered from the opening chapter. Reminds me a lot of I Robot.

Considering its a short story, you get it marvelously right by going straight for the kill, and not by describing the murder but the consequences afterwards. Had it been intended as a larger story some background would have been required, but in this case its acceptable.

I noticed a part that I believe required a page break. Most likely this is a fault of fictionpress as I have encountered similar problems.

I look forward to reading more as soon as time permits it.

Hope you submit some more stuff.

this is a great story it has depth which entertains at the same time makes the reader feel like part of the story i wish to read more of your stories soon

great story! I loved it! :)

I thought this story was very well written and provocative. You obviously have a strong interest in this kind of genre/plot. I think you should keep up with this sort of theme. I like to read creative interpretations of the future like this: man-machine interaction, technology, etc. Very cool. Keep it up!

Very good. I quick read, but very enjoyable. You write well, and the characters were developed pretty well for such a short story. Do you have anything else in the works that you are thinking of posting? I'd be interesting in reading that, too. Keep writing!

Asimov is getting some real play here. I think you should list the three Laws at the beginning of the first chapter so that readers who aren't familiar with Asimov can follow the plot a little better. I know them, but not everyone does.

This was a good chapter, and the puzzle pieces are beginning to fall into place. I don't understand what Samantha realizes at the end, but I guess that'll be answered in the next chapter. The odd reactions of the robots are throwing me off a little, but hopefully there'll be a good reason why they're acting so strangely.

Dun dun dun! It sounds like LN8 has been tampered with... But by whom? The plot thickens...

No grammar or spelling mistakes to note, you have done a good job in that department. You do a good job with the dialogue as well, I think it's one of your strong suits. You make the robot sound a lot more human than a hunk of metal through the way it speaks, sometimes. Or perhaps it is just a human flaw that we all find the familiar in the alien (or robotic).

Good job on this one, I'm on to the next chapter.

Interesting premise. You do a good job characterizing how humans feel around robots: technically safe, but unsettled at a deep level. It's almost the way kids are scared of the dark: they know there's really nothing there, but can't shake the nagging feeling that something bad is. I like it so far. I'm on to the next chapter...

It's over?

Not fair!

Well, it was definitely good. I liked it a lot, and I'll probably read it again. You sent a good message and really depicted robots as being... beings too.

Your explaination was flawless and left for no plot holes, a feat in itself; you ALSO kept it interesting, something my explainations never are. Altogether a good read.

Keep Writing!

K. R. Ukido

What? What makes sense? I'm clueless :).

I actually haven't found anything to complain about since Chapter One... which is incredible for me since I LOVE to complain. Good chapter!

Keep writing!

K. R. Ukido

LN-8 is screwed up! I wonder who's doing that to him...?

Once again you've made me want to read more. I love the mystery so far, and the fact that you made the future believeable astounds me. That's hard to do. Great job!

Keep writing!

K. R. Ukido

...I'm impressed.

You've really caught my attention here-this was the perfect first chapter of what I'm sure will be a good story.

I noticed a few little nitpicky mistakes, but all in all the chapter was well-detialed, thought-oiut, consise, and a good read.

Keep writing!

K. R Ukido

Wonderful! I don't really like Sci-fi, but you have changed my mind completely! Keep writing; you're very good at it.