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Reviews For: Bathroom Graffiti

Khali Draegan
2007-05-07
ch 1,
abusea-**-men
Rachizzle
2007-05-05
ch 1, anon.
abuseo_O

Vomit.. HM... .. ... MGMKHKLAJDKLA! >_> lol


Good poem, I liked it.
xDancingintheRainx
2007-05-05
ch 1,
abuseWow. I really like this piece. Everything is worded so well and the imagery is really clear. I can see the scenes and the graffiti on the walls. Such a sad piece, but you worded it so gracefully. My only suggestion is this: When you said: "Unheard cries of help still spiral
across tiles and closed doors.
Pleads for love and help"

instead of saying "help" twice, I'd suggest using it only once and putting a different word in there. Other than that, I think you did an excellent job!
killer syntax
2007-05-05
ch 1,
abuseWow, what a creative edge to an otherwise undesireable subject. Very enjoyable, and very interesting. Nice job!
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