| Reviews for Bathroom Graffiti |
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T.B. Cross 5/7/07 . chapter 1a-fucking-men |
Rachizzle 5/5/07 . chapter 1 o_O Vomit.. HM... .. ... MGMKHKLAJDKLA! _ lol Good poem, I liked it. |
xDancingintheRainx 5/5/07 . chapter 1Wow. I really like this piece. Everything is worded so well and the imagery is really clear. I can see the scenes and the graffiti on the walls. Such a sad piece, but you worded it so gracefully. My only suggestion is this: When you said: "Unheard cries of help still spiral across tiles and closed doors. Pleads for love and help" instead of saying "help" twice, I'd suggest using it only once and putting a different word in there. Other than that, I think you did an excellent job! |
killer syntax 5/5/07 . chapter 1Wow, what a creative edge to an otherwise undesireable subject. Very enjoyable, and very interesting. Nice job! |